First Campaigner Challenge


The door swung shut and she took a breath of sweet wonderful freedom. She wouldn’t have to look over her shoulder when she walked out the door. Never again. Shifting the back pack onto her shoulders she hurried down to the bus stop.
“Hey MJ, hold on a minute!”
She glanced down the street, where the hell was the bus. She waved to her friend Marie. “Hey there, what’s kicking?”
“Not much, you’re really going through with it huh?”
“I said I would, now’s the time to do it while he’s away.”
“You’re still not going to tell me where you’re going, are you?”
She shook her head. “We talked about that Marie. If you don’t know where I am you can’t tell anyone.”
“OK” Anna Marie sniffed. “Just please be careful.”
The bus had turned the corner, she reached and gave her friend a hug.
“I will, you do the same ok?”
The bus pulled up and she got on, paid her fare and turned to wave good by to the one person she would miss from her old life as the door swung shut.

If so inclined please like my entry linky on Rachel’s site it’s #222

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11 thoughts on “First Campaigner Challenge

  1. Yay very nice! I think I have an idea maybe I’ll get it down tomorrow.

  2. mish says:

    Ah , new beginnings …
    Realistic dialogue … a snippet from a real-life scenario . Well done !

  3. elizabethannewrites says:

    Very well done! Good to see such a different, and realistic, take on this challenge.

  4. Tara says:

    Fantastic writing – great dialogue. You’ve created strong character in 200 words. Nice.

  5. Nice conversation piece! Makes me wonder what she meant by “old life.”

    Awesome job, Elaine! 🙂

  6. Thanks Folks. You think 200 words is a lot until you get an idea for it. I actually ended up cutting it down twice. 😦

  7. I definitly want to know where she’s going. Well done. Mine is #72

  8. Tiger Gray says:

    Hello! Congratulations, you’ve made it in to the top five for this challenge! Welcome to stage two. 🙂

  9. This is a great scene. Ready for the hero’s journey.

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